That's pretty much what real radio chatter from combat pilots sounds like, though.
They're trained to keep their cool under pressure, to speak clearly and concisely, and not to shout over the radio.
Combat pilots don't panic - their gears are turning a mile a minute trying to solve the problem and save their lives until the very last moment.
Probably my favorite review of Top Gun came from a Tomcat driver: "There were only two inaccuracies. We don't sweat in a dogfight, and it doesn't take us a week to get laid."
--Jonah